Revision of "DEAR SIR"

Taman Alfa Indah Rd.
Blok F7/29 Joglo
West Jakarta 11640

July 27th, 2008
IOC Office
Dimsdale Street
New York 11110

Dear Sir,

I hear your promotion about free trip to the next Olympics in Beijing from my friend. She told me that I should participate this event because this was a rare event. And I will feel unlucky
if I cannot join this event.

I have some reasons for you to elect me as the winner of the ticket. First of all, my brother will participate in that event as the player. It was really a big pride to our family. As you know, my brother will be very confident if I support him right at the stadium. Secondly, I was very interested in sports, although I'm not an athlete. And this was the first time I have an opportunity to join this event. Last year, my parent did not give me permission to travel abroad alone. And this year, unfortunately, my family did not have enough money to send me there.

If I am chosen to win this ticket, I will be very happy and very grateful. If it was necessary, I would ask one of my friends to put my article about this Olympic trip in the magazine where she works at. Then, I will also tell my friend about my trip and the pleasure I have there. One more thing, I would not forget to tell my friend, how generous IOC company.

You can contact me at +62888 1666 4477 or my email bella@yahoo.com.

I would like to express my gratitude to you and I am looking forward to hearing from you soon

Faithfully yours,

Christabella A. Kurniawan

Revision of "city B"

According to my evaluation, the best place where Olympic Games held is at city B. The temperature in city B -especially in July- is very suitable for the Olympic Games. Its climate is moderate rain, so rain is rarely falling.

Its accommodation is also the biggest and the largest among the three cities. It was a benefit for us as the council, because the participant and the guest did not have to waste time to look for place to stay.

Consider its venue, city B was the most promising because it has the biggest total capacity, 140,000 people. This number of the capacity of the people will be available in 2010.

In terms of security aspect, city B is quite good. Though its Liberator caused difficulties, now is under control.